ext_12349 ([identity profile] berseker.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] evocates 2008-09-09 05:59 pm (UTC)

OMG. This is just too beautiful to take it all at once. I´ll have to read it a thousand times. You have an amazing way with words.

(Just one thing: In this paragraph Your heart is empty: you had drained it and sold it like a pretty trinket to your father, in hopes for getting a nod and a step up the ladder. So, he gave his heart to his father, right? But then in the next line, we get You had given it to him the day you ripped off your Princely mask and this him is Tamaki. I was confused for a few seconds there (like, wait, are we still talking about his father?). So... I don´t know. The whole story is gorgeous and perfect and I´m not sure I´m not being stupid, but I just thought I´d point it out.)

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